The line graph illustrates the amount of fast food consumed by teenagers in Australia
between 1975 and 2000, a period of 25 years.
Overall, the consumption of fish and chips declined over the period, whereas the
amount of pizza and hamburgers that were eaten increased.
In 1975, the most popular fast food with Australian teenagers was fish and chips,
being eaten 100 times a year. This was far higher than Pizza and hamburgers, which
were consumed approximately 5 times a year. However, apart from a brief rise again
from 1980 to 1985, the consumption of fish and chips gradually declined over the 25
year timescale to finish at just under 40 times per year.
In sharp contrast to this, teenagers ate the other two fast foods at much higher
levels. Pizza consumption increased gradually until it overtook the consumption of
fish and chips in 1990. It then leveled off from 1995 to 2000. The biggest rise was
seen in hamburgers, increasing sharply throughout the 1970’s and 1980’s, exceeding
fish and chips consumption in 1985. It finished at the same level that fish and chips
began, with consumption at 100 times a year.
Step 1: Band Score Analysis
Estimated IELTS Band Score: 7.5
- Task Achievement: 7.5 – Effectively presents key trends, but could include more comparisons.
- Coherence & Cohesion: 8.0 – Well-structured with logical progression.
- Lexical Resource: 7.5 – Good range of vocabulary, but some repetition.
- Grammar: 7.5 – Mostly accurate, with minor refinements needed for precision.
Band 8 :
The line graph illustrates the annual consumption of three types of fast food—pizza, hamburgers, and fish and chips—by Australian teenagers from 1975 to 2000.
Overall, the consumption of fish and chips declined significantly over the period, whereas the intake of pizza and hamburgers increased.
In 1975, fish and chips were the most popular fast food, consumed 100 times per year. In contrast, pizza and hamburgers were eaten much less frequently, at around five times per year. However, while fish and chips initially saw a slight rise in popularity from 1980 to 1985, their consumption then declined steadily to just under 40 times per year by 2000.
On the other hand, pizza and hamburger consumption showed a rising trend. Pizza intake increased gradually and surpassed fish and chips in 1990 before leveling off between 1995 and 2000. The most significant rise was seen in hamburgers, which increased sharply throughout the 1980s, overtaking fish and chips in 1985. By 2000, hamburger consumption had reached 100 times per year, matching the initial level of fish and chips in 1975.
Word Count: 167
Band 9 :
The line graph depicts changes in the frequency of fast food consumption among Australian teenagers from 1975 to 2000, focusing on three types: pizza, hamburgers, and fish and chips.
Overall, fish and chips saw a notable decline in popularity, whereas pizza and hamburgers gained increasing traction over the 25-year period.
In 1975, fish and chips were the most widely consumed fast food, eaten approximately 100 times per year. In contrast, both pizza and hamburgers were far less popular, with consumption levels of around five times annually. While fish and chips experienced a brief resurgence from 1980 to 1985, their consumption then declined steadily, reaching just under 40 times per year by 2000.
Conversely, pizza and hamburgers exhibited a significant upward trajectory. Pizza consumption rose gradually, overtaking fish and chips in 1990 before stabilizing between 1995 and 2000. Meanwhile, hamburgers saw the most dramatic increase, surging throughout the 1980s and surpassing fish and chips in 1985. By 2000, hamburger consumption had risen to 100 times per year, equaling the initial level of fish and chips in 1975.
In summary, the data reveals a marked shift in Australian teenagers’ fast food preferences, with hamburgers and pizza replacing fish and chips as the dominant choices.
Word Count: 172
Comparison Table
| Feature | Band 7-8 Version | Band 9 Version |
|---|---|---|
| Vocabulary | Uses common phrases (e.g., “saw a slight rise”) | More precise vocabulary (e.g., “experienced a brief resurgence”) |
| Sentence Structure | Mostly straightforward sentences | More varied and complex sentence structures |
| Data Presentation | Covers key trends clearly | Provides sharper analysis and better comparisons |
| Clarity & Cohesion | Well-structured and clear | More sophisticated phrasing and flow |
Examples from Essays
| Aspect | Band 7-8 Example | Band 9 Example |
|---|---|---|
| Sentence Structure | “Pizza intake increased gradually and surpassed fish and chips in 1990 before leveling off between 1995 and 2000.” | “Pizza consumption rose gradually, overtaking fish and chips in 1990 before stabilizing between 1995 and 2000.” |
| Data Presentation | “The most significant rise was seen in hamburgers, which increased sharply throughout the 1980s, overtaking fish and chips in 1985.” | “Meanwhile, hamburgers saw the most dramatic increase, surging throughout the 1980s and surpassing fish and chips in 1985.” |
| Clarity & Cohesion | “Overall, the consumption of fish and chips declined significantly over the period, whereas the intake of pizza and hamburgers increased.” | “Overall, fish and chips saw a notable decline in popularity, whereas pizza and hamburgers gained increasing traction over the 25-year period.” |
Grammar Mistakes
- Original: “The biggest rise was seen in hamburgers, increasing sharply throughout the 1970’s and 1980’s, exceeding fish and chips consumption in 1985.”
Correction: “Hamburger consumption saw the most significant rise, increasing sharply throughout the 1970s and 1980s, surpassing fish and chips in 1985.” - Original: “In sharp contrast to this, teenagers ate the other two fast foods at much higher levels.”
Correction: “In stark contrast, teenagers consumed the other two fast foods at significantly higher rates.” - Original: “Pizza consumption increased gradually until it overtook the consumption of fish and chips in 1990. It then leveled off from 1995 to 2000.”
Correction: “Pizza consumption rose gradually, surpassing fish and chips in 1990, before stabilizing between 1995 and 2000.”
Vocabulary Repetition
| Repeated Word | Suggested Alternatives |
|---|---|
| “Increase” | Rise, Growth, Surge, Climb |
| “Decline” | Drop, Decrease, Reduction, Fall |
| “Consumption” | Intake, Usage, Frequency |
IELTS Writing Task 1 Exercises with Answers
Fill in the blanks using appropriate words:
- The graph illustrates changes in the _______ (amount/type) of fast food consumed by Australian teenagers.
Answer: amount - By 1990, pizza consumption had _______ (risen/fallen) and overtaken fish and chips.
Answer: risen - The consumption of fish and chips steadily _______ (increased/declined) over the period.
Answer: declined - Hamburger intake saw the most _______ (gradual/dramatic) increase throughout the 1980s.
Answer: dramatic
