The line graph depicts the number of people who visited Caryl Island over an 8 year
period from 2000, with data given in two yearly increments.
In 2000, the number of people who visited the destination for the first time was
approximately 8,000 per annum, compared with only about 3,000 returning visitors.
However, by 2002, this trend had reversed, with slightly more than 4,000 new visitors
compared to nearly 10,000 returning visitors.
From 2002 to 2006, both returning and first time visitor numbers increased
dramatically rising to a combined total of well over 24,000 visitors.
While the combined number of people visiting the island remained high in 2008, the
variation between first time and returning visitors narrowed as the number of people
on their first visit continued to increase while those coming back for additional visits
fell.
In total, it is evident that the number of people visiting Caryl island increased
significantly over the period given.
(156 words)
Estimated IELTS Band Score: 7.5 – 8.0
- Task Achievement: 7.5 – Covers all key trends but could include more precise data references.
- Coherence & Cohesion: 8.0 – Good logical structure with smooth transitions.
- Lexical Resource: 7.5 – A wide range of vocabulary, but some phrases could be more natural.
- Grammar: 7.5 – Generally accurate, with minor refinements needed for fluency.
Band 8
The line graph illustrates the number of first-time and returning visitors to Caryl Island from 2000 to 2008.
Overall, the total number of visitors increased significantly over the period, with returning visitors outnumbering first-time visitors after 2002.
In 2000, around 8,000 people visited the island for the first time, while only 3,000 were return visitors. However, by 2002, this pattern had reversed, with fewer than 5,000 first-time visitors compared to nearly 10,000 returnees.
Between 2002 and 2006, both categories saw substantial growth, reaching a combined total of over 24,000 visitors. Returning visitors peaked at approximately 15,000 in 2006 before slightly declining by 2008, while the number of first-time visitors continued rising, reaching nearly 12,000.
By the end of the period, although the total number of visitors remained high, the gap between first-time and returning visitors had narrowed.
Word Count: 160
Band 9
The line graph presents data on the number of first-time and returning visitors to Caryl Island between 2000 and 2008.
Overall, the total number of visitors rose significantly over the period, with returning visitors surpassing first-time visitors from 2002 onwards.
In 2000, approximately 8,000 tourists visited Caryl Island for the first time, while the number of returning visitors stood at just 3,000. However, by 2002, this trend had reversed, with first-time visitors declining to around 4,000, whereas the number of repeat visitors surged to nearly 10,000.
From 2002 to 2006, both categories experienced a sharp increase, reaching a combined total of over 24,000 visitors. Returning visitors peaked at roughly 15,000 in 2006 before experiencing a slight drop by 2008, while first-time visitors continued to rise, reaching approximately 12,000.
By the end of the period, the total number of visitors remained high, but the difference between first-time and repeat visitors had diminished.
Word Count: 162
Comparison Table
| Feature | Band 7-8 Version | Band 9 Version |
|---|---|---|
| Vocabulary | Simple but effective terms like “substantial growth” | More precise language like “experienced a sharp increase” |
| Sentence Structure | Mostly clear and simple | More varied and complex structures |
| Data Presentation | Covers key trends but with slight vagueness | More specific and precise use of numbers |
| Clarity & Cohesion | Logical and smooth transitions | Slightly more refined and natural phrasing |
Examples from Essays
| Aspect | Band 7-8 Example | Band 9 Example |
|---|---|---|
| Sentence Structure | “By the end of the period, although the total number of visitors remained high, the gap between first-time and returning visitors had narrowed.” | “By the end of the period, the total number of visitors remained high, but the difference between first-time and repeat visitors had diminished.” |
| Data Presentation | “Between 2002 and 2006, both categories saw substantial growth, reaching a combined total of over 24,000 visitors.” | “From 2002 to 2006, both categories experienced a sharp increase, reaching a combined total of over 24,000 visitors.” |
| Clarity & Cohesion | “Returning visitors peaked at approximately 15,000 in 2006 before slightly declining by 2008.” | “Returning visitors peaked at roughly 15,000 in 2006 before experiencing a slight drop by 2008.” |
Grammar Mistakes
- Original: “However, by 2002, this trend had reversed, with slightly more than 4,000 new visitors compared to nearly 10,000 returning visitors.”
Correction: “However, by 2002, this trend had reversed, with just over 4,000 first-time visitors compared to nearly 10,000 returnees.” (Improved clarity and consistency.) - Original: “Returning visitors peaked at nearly 15,000 in 2006, before slightly decreasing by 2008.”
Correction: “Returning visitors peaked at nearly 15,000 in 2006 before experiencing a slight decline by 2008.” (More natural phrasing.) - Original: “While the combined number of people visiting the island remained high in 2008, the variation between first-time and returning visitors narrowed.”
Correction: “Although the total number of visitors remained high in 2008, the gap between first-time and returning visitors decreased.” (More concise and natural phrasing.)
Vocabulary Repetition
| Repeated Word | Suggested Alternatives |
|---|---|
| “Increase” | Growth, Rise, Surge, Climb |
| “Visitors” | Tourists, Guests, Travelers |
| “Decline” | Drop, Decrease, Fall |
IELTS Writing Task 1 Exercises with Answers
Fill in the blanks using appropriate words:
- The graph _______ (illustrates/shows) the number of first-time and returning visitors to Caryl Island from 2000 to 2008.
Answer: illustrates - In 2000, the number of first-time visitors _______ (declined/exceeded) that of returning visitors.
Answer: exceeded - Returning visitors _______ (peaked/declined) at nearly 15,000 in 2006 before experiencing a slight drop.
Answer: peaked - By 2008, first-time visitors had _______ (overtaken/reached) around 12,000, following a steady upward trend.
Answer: reached
